Criticism vs. Critique

I entered a romance-writing contest several months ago and received  my results back today via email. The contest was the first 10 pages of your WIP (work in progress) and a brief synopsis of the overall plot. I hate writing a synopsis and avoid it whenever I can. Unfortunately, for this contest, one was required, but the rules stated it would not be part of the overall judging.

Three judges and their scores combined gave you your overall score. One of the judges was a professional/published writer in romantic fiction, one a beta reader, and one an unpublished writer, but a retired teacher and editor. This last judge was the harshest, and I’ll say meanest of the three. He tore my work apart, and I mean  TORE it apart. He critiqued where I put commas, my dialogue – which he called “trite”, my heroine, which he said he didn’t like and nothing would convince him to, and my sentence structure.  And he said my synopsis sucked. He really did! The published author gave me very constructive criticism NICELY, and pointed out a few things that needed improvement. The beta reader wrote how much she loved the story, the characters and the setting, and also, nicely, pointed out a few things for improvement. She gave me the highest scores of all three. You can guess who graded me the lowest – and I mean low.

Now my ego is as strong as an ox. People who know me know that. I can take criticism, constructive or otherwise, and pull out the parts of it that will help me in the future. I did this with all three of these judges, because they all had valid points.  But I wondered why the editor/teacher judge was so harsh in his delivery. He didn’t know me, knew nothing about me except for the pages being judged, and he sincerely could have made his points succinctly without all the nastiness.

This hasn’t turned me off to entering contests at all, because with each one I do enter, I learn something valuable. What I learned from this contest was that the beta reader, a lover of romantic fiction such as I am, is the person I write for, not the judge. The reader wrote comments all over the entry, such as “Aww!” when she read something touching, and “I love that he said that,” to a dialogue for my hero.

This is the person I write for. Plus myself, of course.

And here’s the best part of this story: I entered the same 10pages in another contest and two editors from publishing houses notified me they liked what they’d read so much they wanted to see the entire manuscript.

So THERE! Mr. Smarty-pants judge!

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A little conflict is good for the soul…and the book!

This past Saturday, I attended my monthly NH Romance Writer’s Meeting in Bow and the group was treated to a lecture/talk by uber-bestselling author Judith Arnold (JudithArnold.com) on the subject of CONFLICT. As writers of romance, we know that the main road to a happy ever after story is usually peppered with snags, twists and turns, until the end, where our heroes and heroines finally get together for evermore. Those snags, twists and turns are typically taken up with conflict. Conflict between our protagonists, or with other people or situations in the story.

Judith quoted one famous author who said the basis behind a conflict in a romance story is such: Your hero is a firefighter and the heroine is an arsonist. How’s that for conflict? Now of course, we all know the heroine isn’t actually an arsonist, but is suspected of being one, and the hero must discover who the actual bad guy is so he can clear the heroine’s name and they can live… you got it: happily ever after. Or maybe it just looks like the heroine is our arsonist because she is acting suspiciously. Either way, we know  our firefighter will have to do more than just fight a fire to get the girl. He’ll probably have to go through a fire to do so. This is defined as interpersonal conflict, or conflict between characters.

Conflict is also evident within our characters’s makeup. Perhaps your heroine is a strict vegan PETA  member and your hero is a died in the wool carnivore cowboy. Can your heroine come to grips with her own strict moral beliefs and come to accept another viewpoint? Can the hero? This is internal conflict, or the conflict that rages upon us internally. I once wrote a short story about a female police officer who had been abused by her pastor as a teenager. As an adult, she struggled with the professional convictions of her job to protect and serve, and her personal desire for revenge. I won’t tell you the ending, but when I wrote it, I drew on my own thoughts as to what I would do if placed in the same situation. Those of you who know me know I love me a good revenge story!

Man against the Machine is the ultimate external or global conflict. Fighting against the forces of Big Brother corporations, or deadly political regimes, government corruption and so forth.

So, when we’re writing, we need to remember that conflict is key to the romance story, because after all, the story of a guy who meets a girl and marries her is just too boring for words. STUFF needs to happen and the stuff is conflict.

What do you think about this? Drop me aline and let me know.

Until next time, I’m off. And I’m conflicted: should I nap or should I write?

Conflict.

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Where do you get your ideas?

The other day a woman I know asked me, very innocently, “where do you get your ideas for your stories?” This is a question EVERY writer in history has probably been asked. The follow up to the question was, “I mean, you live a pretty sheltered life. You don’t travel much, you’re not famous, and you’re middle aged.”  (See what I meant by innocently?!?) “Where do you find the inspiration for your stories?”

No, I didn’t deck her. Wanted to, but didn’t.

I realize that for people who don’t write, either for a living, or because to them – like me – writing is their oxygen, this is a valid question. I can only answer for myself and no other writer, so I will.

Inspiration for my stories usually starts with character for me. I read about someone, or see an interesting face on the street, and I start to wonder about them. Who they are, what job do they have, what tragedies have they suffered. Then I concoct a little life scenario in my head about them. If they’ve suffered a loss, how has it affected them? Did they just leave a long-term relationship, and if so, why?  Do they have children, or do they even want them. What is interesting about them? What kinds of foods do they like and dislike? What would it take to make them happy? All these things run through my mind by just seeing someone with a thought-provoking face.

Once I have that person figured out, I look for their foil. If my main character likes Chinese food, this one may hate it, etc. Core values are very important to me because people basically don’t change. Behavior can change, but deep down we stay pretty much the same unless something so drastic happens in our lives that causes us to fundamentally change who we are. I’ve had people say to me, “wow, are you a cynic or what? People change everyday.” To that I usually respond, just because an alcoholic isn’t drinking, it doesn’t mean they’re not an alcoholic anymore. It means they are controlling their behavior, but deep down, they will always be an alcoholic. You can agree or disagree with me, but that’s what I believe, and it’s how I build my characters.

So, after I have the two main people in my mind I want to write about, I run plotlines in my head. This is where being a chronic insomniac is a good thing. I lay awake most nights, trying to sleep, but usually having it allude me. To pass the time, I think up scenarios to throw the two people I’ve imagined up into. Recently, I wrote a story about an Olympic figure skater. Guess where the inspiration for that came from? I love TOP CHEF and never miss a season. I wrote a story about a chef with the tagline Top Chef meets The Bodyguard.

Inspiration is all around us, every day, and everywhere. I guess I just hone in on the facets that mean the most to me, imagination-wise, and go from there.

So, that’s where the ideas for my stories come from. Where do yours come from? Let me know. I’m really interested in hearing about that.

 

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I really should be writing…

The gentle art of procrastination has been many a writer’s downfall, mine included. I have such a limited writing life, time-wise, that there always seems to be something that can – and does – pull me away from the laptop. Self-discipline is a virtue I aspire to, but have, as of this moment in time, never fully attained. I can easily be swayed to go out to lunch with a friend, get my nails done, or finish the new Nora Roberts book because I’m at a critical point in the plot.

All of these are just flat excuses for the fact that I should be writing.

Life seems to intervene as well, though, when I’m trying to finish something, or working towards a deadline. There is always grocery shopping that needs to be done, laundry that needs to be washed, dust bunnies that need to be vacuumed, and errands that need to be run. These distractions, although necessary, can wreck havoc with a writing schedule. Having little children in the house who are not school age yet but too old to nap; doing the car pool shuffle to and from school for those that are; PTA meetings, book club meetings, play dates. All these things took me away from writing when my daughter was younger. When she got older, I needed to go back to work outside the home, so there went my dreams of a full day of writing while she was occupied with her life.

For eleven years I was basically divorced from my desire to write. Then 2013 hit and with it, I was downsized at work. What to do with the time I now had on my hands. Duh! No brainer, there.

New Year’s Eve of this year I made one resolution that I am trying ardently to stick to. On my days off from my paying job, I slot at least 6 hours of uninterrupted writing time per day. Most of that time is spent in front of the laptop, with me tapping my fingers in frustration, attempting to find the perfect words and phrases. But at least it is time that I am actively writing, not passively wishing I was. Our clothes are clean, we are not starving because there is no food in the house, and every now and then a dust bunny escapes to be dealt with another day, but the commitment to write is always present and accomplished. I even have it plotted on the calendar that hangs above my desk. Whenever I look at it, I am reminded that no matter what, this day I will writing something.

Today is my day off from work. And look what I’m doing! Success.

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A room with a view…..

When penning a story, the setting, or the environment, the action takes place in can set the tone, mood, or even background for the entire story. Any editor will tell you where you put your characters is an important part of the makeup of a good book.

That got me to thinking about the environment in which you actually write the story. Does the space where you create have a positive or negative effect on your writing, how you write, and ultimately, if it all pulls together in the end?

When I first starting writing seriously (read that to mean for publication and money!) I had an old Brother typewriter that sat at my kitchen table in my two room apartment. No spell check, no online thesaurus and certainly no delete key. It would take me three or four or more tries to get an article perfect in every sense – no spelling, grammar, or punctuation mistakes included – before I would mail it to an editor. And by mail I mean walk to the Post Office. Not press a send key. I wrote this way for years.

Fast forward to the birth of my daughter. My husband bought our first computer and monitor with Corel Word 4 attached. At the time, this was Heaven for me. Now I had easy access to delete or correct something within the text. At this point in my life, my writing skyrocketed in volume just because I could type fast and edit as I went along. The computer sat in a spare bedroom we hysterically called, “our office.” The only problem with this setup was that we had one computer and two adults who needed access to it.  And again, I wrote this way for a decade plus five years.

Another trip into the time machine and we’re in real time. I have my own laptop (Yea!) and now, I actually have my own space to write, too. Our attic runs the length and width of the house so it’s two complete rooms. One is for storage, the other is for me. I have my own desk – okay it’s my daughter’s old desk, but she’s not living here any more – my own bookshelves that house all my reference books, a couch for stretching out in when my menopausal back and butt get numb from sitting for hours, and even a television if I need to reconnect with the outside world for a few moments. The desk sits in front of a beautiful big window where I’ve been watching the never-ending snow come down recently as I gaze off and think of the right word I want to type. To me, this is writing Nirvana. Private space, no noise and good natural lighting from the skylights in the roof. I now, hysterically, refer to my writing space as my “writer’s loft.” A little pretentious, yes, but hey, it works for me.

Is it any wonder my writing has improved so much lately that I actually have professionals wanting to see it? Hmmm. Makes you think, doesn’t it…

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Editing. A necessary evil…

This is not me complaining: this is my reality.

I received word a few days ago that a publishing house is very interested in a story I’ve written, but that it needs a few edits and tweeks. The tweeks were lined out for me, but the editing is up to me alone. I’ll say this once, and it’s true: I am not now nor have I ever been exclusively married to my words.  Sentences get divorced, words undergo formal separations. I know every story is made stronger with good editing and refining. A word change here, a phrase turn there. It can only get better.

Here’s my dilemma, though, and the one I’ve struggled with forever as a writer. When is editing too much, and when is it not enough?

I like certain phrases, and I know I overuse them. Once is good writing, twice can be annoying, and anything more than that is outright non-imaginative. There are certain words I tend to use as descriptors, which in reality aren’t. Again, I know this and always try to find alternatives.

But it’s hard work.

When I was just writing because it gave me pleasure, I didn’t think about these things. I wrote phrases the way I liked them; I used words the way I wanted to. But since I’ve finally bitten the proverbial bullet and ventured into the world of publishing, I can no longer simply write just  to please myself. I realize I need to stick to certain grammatical rules and sentence structures. I understand the need to use active voice and not passive. I agree with sticking to one point of view at a time, even though every character’s thoughts are flowing through me simultaneously.

I know all this, and I accept I need to do it in order to get my work in front of a paying and adoring public.

But it’s hard work.

Who was it that said “anything worth doing is worth doing well?”

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My Calendar

I was checking my writing calendar today – and yes, I have one that tells me what I’m going to be working on on any given day in the month – and today I was suppose to blog on my menopause site, Moments from Menopause. I realized I had nothing new to say on the topic, and since I hadn’t done any research so far this week for a blog entry, I decided to move over to this site and give you a little insight into my writing process. I realize that sounds slightly arrogant ( or more than slightly) my saying “my writing process,” but there really is a method to what I do.

Since I only have two days off during the week from my job that pays me a salary, and I’m usually involved with things during the weekend with hubby, I only have these two days in which to unleash my always spinning mind. Believe me, if I could type in my sleep, or even bring my laptop to my job, I would. During the night I can awaken two to three times with ideas that have formed, or character motivations that are always popping up in my unconscious mind. I try hard to remember them and when I wake up for good in the morning, I usually run to my laptop and jot them down. Usually. Menopause really has done a number on my memory and I’m lucky if I can remember half of what woke me up.

But back to my calendar. At the beginning of every month I make a notation on almost every day about what I want to write about or work on for that day. For instance, in january I blogged 14 times. This corresponded to the 14 post-its I had secured to certain days of the month. If I’m working on a new fiction story, I write the name of the work on the day I wish to work on it, so that serves as a reminder and then that day I’m devoted to just that work. This actually keeps me focused on one project at a time, since I have four to five that are going at any given time. It’s easier to devote an entire month to one work, than to try and split the time I do have free between all of them. Like I said, my mind is always spinning.

I hope one day to have a job that pays me to stay home and write every day of the week. In fact, I say a prayer to that effect every night.

And prayers, like wishes, do come true if you wish/pray hard enough.

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The origin of “TAWK TO ME”

Those of you who know me personally and have heard me speak, know there is little doubt that I grew up in Brooklyn, NY. My diction, the way I can’t pronounce the letters “er ” at the end of words ( I say “mutha” for “mother”) and my oft times nasal twang all give my birthplace a shout out.  So instead of calling  part of this site “Talk to Me,” I wanted you to really hear my voice when I said it, so “Tawk to me” is how it would sound if we were face to face.

This got me to thinking about my writing and writing in general when you want to bring your characters to life. The United States language is a huge mix of  accents, colloquialisms, and  cliched metaphors all melded together to form our wonderful country.  No one speaks the same way as someone else, and neither should your characters. They can share phrases, accents, and even diction, but each character should “sound” different even if they are from the same place.

I lived in Wisconsin for seven years and the natives called a water fountain a “bubbler,” and soda, “pop.”   In Brooklyn, my aunt called “Oil”, “Earl,” as in “they delivered some earl to the burna ( Burner!) yesterday and now I’ve got to pay for it.”

Wouldn’t you recognize someone who was from Ireland, if they said, “aye” and ‘Tis?” Or our neighbors to the north when they end every sentence with “eh?” Valley girls in California  spew “Oh, m’Gawd! and “Fer sures!” to this day. In the U.K. the words “Brilliant” and “bloody” are descriptive staples. Australians call each other “Sheila” and “Mate.”

Southerners say “Hey,” while northerners say “Hi.” Highly educated people wouldn’t think of saying “Gotta” or “lotta,” and my cousins would never end a sentence with “Don’t you agree?” They’d be more likely to say, “ya know?”

I live in New Hampshire now. Wicked weather, eh? (Get it?!)

So, “TAWK TO ME.” Tell me something, ask me a question, give me some needed guidance.  Just “TAWK TO ME.”

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Writing is my Oxygen

Peggy Jaeger’s love of writing began in the third grade when she won her first writing contest with a short story titled THE CLOWN. After that, there was no stopping her. Throughout college and after she became a Registered Nurse, she had several Nursing Journal articles published, in addition to many mystery short stories in Literary Magazines. When her daughter was born, Peggy had an article titled THE VOICES OF ANGELS published and reprinted in several parenting magazines, detailing the birth and the accident that almost turned this wonderful event into a tragedy. She had two children’s books published in 1995 titled THE KINDNESS TALES and EMILY AND THE EASTER EGGS, which was illustrated by her artist Mother-in-Law. While her daughter grew, Peggy would write age appropriate stories for her to read along with, and finally, to read on her own. Her YA stories are usually mysteries involving smart and funny 12-13 year old girls and an unusual collection of friends and relatives. They all take place in the 1980’s.

In 2005 she was thrilled to have an article on motherhood placed in the CHICKEN SOUP FOR EVERY MOTHER’S SOUL edition. She has won several awards in various Writer’s Digest short story and personal article categories over the years. Recently, she has placed first in the Dixie Kane 2013 Memorial Contest in the Short/Long Contemporary romance Category, and in the Single Title Contemporary Category, and third place in the ICO Romance Contest for 2013.

A life-long and avid romance reader and writer, she is a member of RWA and her local New Hampshire RWA Chapter. She has been a member of Sisters In Crime as well.

Peggy has embraced the techno age and writes for three blogs, all detailing events in her life. One titled, 50 pounds for 50 years is a personal blog about weight loss, one about her life as an EMPTY NESTER and her most recent one MOMENTS FROM MENOPAUSE, a humorous and informative guide through this time in a woman’s life.

She has a Master’s Degree in Nursing Administration and Geriatric Psychology and had several articles published on Alzheimer’s Disease when she ran an Alzheimer’s In-Patient care unit during the 1990’s.

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